Monday, January 18, 2010

My First Story

Hello everyone!
Here is my first story. I hope you like it!

The Horse Who Won

Once upon a time, there was a girl named Abigail who LOVED horses. Her parents owned a horse farm, but Abigail didn't have a horse of her own. She really wanted one though. Then one day, her parents brought home the trailer. It had a horse in it! It was a beautiful bay colored horse.

"Whose horse is this?" I asked anxiously.

"Yours," her father said.

"Really? Thank you so much!"

Right then and there, Abigail decided to name her Hope. Abigail thought it was a beautiful name. She walked her into the empty stall that had held Shining. Shining was sold at an auction.

"Here you are, Hope!" She ate and drank. After she had gotten full, Abigail rode her around the pen. She was very fast, and a good jumper.

"I should enter you in a competition."

Abigail told her father and mother and they said they'd try to get a jockey for her, but it would require lots of training.

"OK! Thanks!" Abigail ran outside and told Hope the news.

She whinnied in excitement.

Abigail began the training right away. She set up old fence pieces and made Hope jump over them. Then they ran around and around the pen really fast.

Finally, Abigail heard news from her mother. "Abigail! We found a jockey. Her name's Katrina."


"You better get some rest. You have a big day tomorrow."

Abigail put Hope in her Stall and went to bed.

The next morning, Abigail woke up and smelled something delicious. "Yum! Fried eggs, toast, sausage, bacon, and orange juice!" Abigail said as she jumped out of bed. She ate breakfast with her parents.

After breakfast, Abigail got Hope out of her stall. Then she loaded her into the trailer. It was a long drive, but finally, they got there.

They met the jockey. She was very nice.

"Hi! You must be Abigail! I've heard so much about you. And this is?" she said looking at Hope.

"Hope. She's my horse."

"What a nice name for a horse!"

Abigail smiled. The race was about to begin.

"Better go!" said Katrina.

"Good luck!" said Abigail.

"Thanks!" She walked off with Hope.

Abigail got her seat and watched as they counted down. "On your marks, get set . . ." the shot of the gun filled the air. So did the running horses as their hooves hit the dirt. Hope was just barely in second. Someone was in front of her. It was . . . Shining!

"Mom! Dad!" yelled Abigail over the noise.

"What Abby?" said her mom.

"It's Shining! She's racing!"

"Oh my gosh!" said her dad. "She's right!"

They watched as Hope was gathering up speed. She pulled in front of Shining just in time! They had won!

"WE WON! WE WON!" said Abigail. Abigail rushed up to her horse to cool her out and collect the prize. It was a trophy filled with money. "You ran a good race!" Abigail said to Katrina.

Katrina, smiled and winked. This was the best day ever for Abigail.

The End.

I hope you liked my post!

(Word Count: 514)


Zelia said...

I loved the story and the drawing.

Dr. Mark said...

Great story. What a wonderful way to kick off the week. I like the illustration, too.

Boquinha said...

I absolutely LOVE the drawing! I love all of it--the girl, the horse, and the trophy full of money. Great horizon line, too.

As for the story, I love your description of how the sounds filled the air. And I think it's great how you incorporated both horses in the race. Very fun story.

Jimmy said...

I love the name of the horses in this story. I love the attention to detail, like the smells of morning breakfast and the noises at the horse race. Thank you for doing this!

J Fo said...

This is great! I think that you two should go into business together and make an entire children's book!